Sunday, February 13, 2011

The War Has Ended!

    As you all know, the first opium war ended in 1842, and 14 years later, the second one began. Today is the day that we can say, the war has officially ended. A new Treaty was signed by the government, but that didn't help the damage that it cost us, which was a lot. The new Treaty that was signed was the Beijing Treaty, but before that the French army invaded Beijing and burned down our emperors' summer residence in the Yuanmingyuan Garden while the court had fled to Jehol in Manchuria during the second war unfortunately.
   The damage was done and the government were blamed.  “Damages of 16 million silver bars were added by the cession of the Kowloon Peninsula opposite to Hong Kong to Great Britain. British and French were subject only to their own jurisdiction, and the two countries were diplomatically recognized by the Qing government and the first real foreign ministry.”-said anonymous. Qing has to pay for all the mess and the French and the British were allies and they only paid their damage to their own property and tools. Qings' empire was the first real foreign government.
   A little known secret was revealed yesterday that was dated back in the 1842. The government was signing different treaties and one of them was the Nanjing Treaty. That was the beginning of the mistake.  That was the beginning of the shameful treaties that came later on, we call this “unequal treaties”.
  Right now China is humiliated because of her losing. Now we have lost our sovereignty over the import taxes and our large income. Even though this war is over, we had still lost. It all started because of Lin Tse-hsü who is a disgrace to us and wishing that the trade of the drug opium, never existed.

2 comments:

  1. This is a good start, but you need to take the opinion out and use it in your editorial. Also, you need a strong lead. Put the background information near the end not the beginning.

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  2. Still too much opinion. My advice is to read through this and list the facts. Then remove all the comments about the facts. You might recycle the parts you delete and use them in your editorial.

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